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Nice vid. I like the overall concept, which is not the common guy-has-to-train-to-become-stronger-and-get-his-revenge-story.#
I won't assess the style presets you used, of course. But as for the character animations and such I would say that they where really good. Not perfect, of course - SRO does not offer proper tools for this. But you did well with the things you have. Ever thought about getting yourself a 3D guy, who could help out with special animations and more?

But there are some things that didn't go so well, in terms of storytelling as well as in other terms.

Have you found someone who helps you with the language in your movies? I'm asking because the first thing, I wanna mention, is the language.
You had problems there before and improved it. But there are still some mistakes.
Just read the text: "The story begins here. A hundred years ago there was a man who led a quiet life. But after some time Death came to him and took his life. Someone saw his suffering."
Either a century ago or one hundred years ago - a hundred years ago is no good style of speech.
The third senteence is a simple one. Simplified together with the second it would read "A man led a quiet life. But Death took his life." Do you see where I'm getting to? The double usage of "life" is no good style, as well. When telling a story you should avoid using words multiple times unless it's necessary for the story itself. Try to paraphrase it. There are many ways to do this. The simplest one would be to write "But after some time Death came to him and took it." Or you go a bit deeper and say "[...] Death killed him" or "took him into his realm". The result is more fluid text and a more comfortable reading. Think about this. I see much potential for improvement here.
Then for the content: Does the first sentence imply that this is a trailer or first part of something? The story of what actually begins here, then? The watcher doesn't now anything yet but you already are writing about the story. What's with the fourth sentence? So... someone saw his suffering. So what? We don't see any immediate relation to this happening - just a guy sitting somewhere, beforehand (that would be the one, who noticed that). Then, afterwards, he runs to a temple of something, does a ritual and gets a weapon. But why? What are his motives? What's the relation of all this to the man who was killed by Death?
Then he starts a conversation with a statue. "So you are the one who helped me." "You have only one chance to kill Death." Now it gets confusing: Who says what and who helped whom with what and when? I haven't seen any "action" that could be told "helping" so what are these guys talking about? And why does he wanna kill Death? (I mean, we don't know anything about this character, but how does it sound when an ordinary man wants to kill Death?) I don't see any logic behind all this and this is bad. I don't know, how others see and understand this but if you wanna tell stories, then they have to be conclusive.
After this, it reads "What if there is no hope?". Why this now? Hope for what? He gets beaten, stands up again and discovers some secret power or something? How come? Is there any meaning behind this?

And finally another logic issue: If he is moving (a.k.a. jumping) in slow motion, then Death and the background should do so, as well.

I don't know, how deep you wanna go with storytelling. But these are the things you should pay attention to when you want to tell good stories and do this in a good language.